To think even now I’d probably give more than I should just to taste your ashtray of a mouth once more. I still remember the way you taste with blood on your lips and thinking that noting sweeter had ever been known to my mouth aside for your name.
You poem here is not good other comment tweaking/ tasteless sorry
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Anonymous2w
Your ashtray of a mouth consumes me with a cancer that is both contagious and undesirable to cure. It corrodes my conscience and flesh for need.
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Anonymous#12w
I always thought about making a little book of em, Lord knows I’ve made at least a hundred of these posts by now. Maybe I’d even use my yikyak handle as my pen name. Though idk if the name “slizzered” would be taken all that seriously on a Barnes and Nobel shelf/table…
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AnonymousOP2w
Ya know short poems are really beautiful like milk and honey? I say go for it but give the rough draft to your man first
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Anonymous#12w
My sister liked Milk and Honey but I’m more of a “Pillow Thoughts” series kinda guy. “I Hope You Stay” was also pretty good.
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AnonymousOP2w
you being a guy was a plot twist. write your book king!!!
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Anonymous#12w
lol sorry about that, I guess I do leave my writing intentionally vague in some ways.