Fan(fic) Service on Yik Yak | Can someone tell me if this is a good line or not for a confession scene in my fic “your voice filled with the utmost sincerity, it was radiantly beautiful just like your face, it would sometimes blind me as if you had dragged me out into the sun.”

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Fan(fic) Service 12w

Can someone tell me if this is a good line or not for a confession scene in my fic “your voice filled with the utmost sincerity, it was radiantly beautiful just like your face, it would sometimes blind me as if you had dragged me out into the sun.”

Anonymous 12w

its a good line objectively (like, in terms of prose, metaphor etc), but you also have to consider context. it doesn't quite sound like a line of dialogue i can see myself saying (generally good advice: read out dialogue to urself), but if ur character tends towards flowy language then it makes sense!

Anonymous 12w

This is a great line. I’m lowkey waiting for it to be part of a hardcore smut fic with some plot and feels sprinkled in tho 😭😭😭