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anyone willing to critique my art?? it’s still wet so i can still work with it… i feel like its FINE but… lacking. any workable advice?

101 upvotes, 24 comments. Yik Yak image post by Anonymous in Share Your Art. "anyone willing to critique my art?? it’s still wet so i can still work with it… i feel like its FINE but… lacking. any workable advice?"

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Anonymous 13w

i understand what you mean. i think it’s because we don’t have a setting? the background should still be dark, sure, but i bet it would add a lot to the story you’re trying to tell if there was a floor and a wall

Anonymous 13w

Add somewhat of a setting like #2 said, I also think it would be worthwhile to kind of centralize the source of the glow inside the ribs and taper the glow outside more, as well.

Anonymous 13w

minor updates so far. still nervous about adding a floor. if i were, they’d be bathroom tiles, but i’m so nervous to ruin it

Anonymous 13w

I actually think that rendering the pelvis as much as the ribs would really help the piece. Right now, as my eyes glide over the painting, I’m drawn to the darkest places, which are the shadows that sit in the ilia. The iliac crests would also benefit from capturing more of that warm light being diffused from inside of the ribcage.

Anonymous 13w

I’m a visual arts minor and from what I’ve learned having negative space isn’t a bad thing but sometimes too much empty space can impact your piece. I definitely think adding some sort of detail to the background would help. Keep it simple though as to not take away from the main subject

Anonymous 13w

I almost feel like there should be harsher lighting on the hips? With that same orangish color that you used for the middle bit?

Anonymous 13w

okay okay u gotta show where the light cast from within the ribs is hitting the surface around it, the floor for instance. also maybe hit the pelvis with another pass with the orange/light color. great work! happy painting👍

Anonymous 13w

OH MY GOD?? That’s stunning! No critiques here. It already looks so fantastic🩷

Anonymous 13w

I really like what your going for here. I think one think that immediately stands out to me is that you don’t have much contrast in the ribs. The ribs obv contrast the glow/fire but the browns of the ribs themselves are very one tone. With such dramatic lighting I’d expect the rib bones to have more drastic changes in shadows across their surface. Also, the “neck” is very undefined. You’ve extended the glow into the neck area but don’t seem to have extended the bones into the neck which doesn’t-

Anonymous

#3 13w

yes, like what if it was coming from the heart? or the lungs? or whatever else and the flow of light showed us everything else

Anonymous

#2 13w

Exactly my thoughts! Some kind of shape, even if it’s just an ambiguous ball in the middle

Anonymous

#3 13w

i like this! thank you both so much. i’ll ply around with it a little:)

Anonymous

#1 13w

thank you so much!!♥️

Anonymous

#2 13w

anyway you can imagine me doing this without… actually adding a surface? i feel i should have centered it better(too late rip) but i really wanted to capture that “lost in the dark and the only concretness is this pain in my chest”

Anonymous

OP 13w

you don’t have to repaint the background necessarily. just add shadows and a bend so we know if rhis person is up against the wall or something

Anonymous

#2 13w

can i ask what you mean by that?

Anonymous

OP 13w

i think the darkness of the background is fine and works, but all i’m missing is the setting. if you added some shadow, it could make it more look like a wall and a floor, or you could even make it reflect off the floor like a mirror, instead of it floating in space. i think adding anything too busy will take away from what you want to draw their eyes to

Anonymous

#2 13w

thanks!! okay maybe i’ll try and put a caulk-esq “horizon” and see if that helps some reflections come together

Anonymous

#2 13w

WAIT HOLD UP I DIDNT HAVE A TON OF FAITH BUT YOU WERE SO RIGHTTT i’ll be back in a few hours with an update ‼️

Anonymous

OP 13w

XD thank you very much. show it to us after

Anonymous

#5 13w

The rest of the figure is so clear that when I look at the pelvis, I’m questioning what the exact form of it is. You’re doing great with the critiques from the comments

Anonymous

#6 13w

Really make sense for the world-logic you’ve created (where the glow is contained within bones). Lady thing I’ll say is the perspective seems a tad off to me. Specifically I feel like we’re either seeing too much of the body’s left ribs and/or they’re at the wrong angle

Anonymous

#6 13w

*last thing

Anonymous

OP 13w

a very faint horizon line might do the trick