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One of my new favorite poems I’ve written for a poem
64 upvotes, 10 comments. Yik Yak image post by Anonymous in Writing. "One of my new favorite poems I’ve written for a poem"
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Anonymous 4w

I meant favorite endings*

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Anonymous 4w

Aw the last couplet is so sweet

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Anonymous 4w

Wait I like this

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Anonymous 4w

the idea isnt new. its a overly harped on cliche, if you want to do something like that the words need to be pretty at least

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Anonymous 4w

ngl this is kind of contrived but keep working. love to see it

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Anonymous 4w

this is how i feel about my wife

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Anonymous replying to -> #4 4w

I appreciate it, I think the first two lines could still use some tweaks for sure, it’s the last couplet I’m proud of

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Anonymous replying to -> OP 4w

increasing your economy and creating more meaningful line breaks (like layering in a double meaning) could do a ton to help reduce cliche images/ideas

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Anonymous replying to -> #6 2w

Sure, I don’t fully mind the cliches here, I think sometimes they can work. I should work more on line breaks and creating enjambment though

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Anonymous replying to -> #5 2w

Is every idea in our writing new? It’s cliche for sure but I don’t think that’s necessarily bad. And yeah I agree, it could be better worded, it was a first draft Ive been trying to make it sound better

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