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I need a love that devours me whole, where every thought is drenched in you, and every heartbeat aches to echo yours, lost together, endlessly obsessed.

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Anonymous 2w

if this is ur piece/poem and ur open to line break/edit suggestions i like the way this reads: 🫶 i need a love which devours me whole, every thought drenched in you, every heartbeat aches to echo - lost together, yours, endlessly obsessed

Anonymous 1w

I respect your opinion. I’m just saying in my opinion it’s best how it was written and I wouldn’t change it

Anonymous

#2 1w

I think the way it’s written is perfect, personally

Anonymous

#3 1w

if it is a poem, you should really try to not end every line w punctuation 🙏 writing is rewriting, nothing wrong with editing what you have. no one becomes a better writer by being told what they already have is perfect

Anonymous

#2 1w

Ya but that’s my opinion. If I thought it needed editing I would say that. Poems can have certain structures or new ones that’s how art develops and changes

Anonymous

#3 1w

🙏 the suggestion i wrote is also my opinion. repeated endstops are more traditional than contemporary, and there is often a better craft choice to make, that’s all. i could explain the craft reasoning behind each line break i made