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Writing 17w

pickaxe

 hi all, this is my first time showing any material at all. i’m far more an artist than a writer but lmk what u think abt this. i know nothing about writing but putting down words that don’t make sense and calling it a day. give me all ur thoughts. all
8 upvotes, 5 comments. Yik Yak image post by pickaxe in Writing. "hi all, this is my first time showing any material at all. i’m far more an artist than a writer but lmk what u think abt this. i know nothing about writing but putting down words that don’t make sense and calling it a day. give me all ur thoughts. all"
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Anonymous 17w

I love writing like this it’s beautiful and confusing in a good way

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Anonymous 17w

i’ve been thinking about this all day. something about it keeps me coming back

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Anonymous 17w

The imagery in this piece is really strong. As #2 said it feels confusing in a pretty way, like being shrunk down and chucked headfirst into a motherboard and then finding out it’s more alive than you are. The one spot I have a suggestion for is “no port can be scanned”. The rest of the piece is active, desperately alive in in a way that is synonymous with survival, but this one spot is passive and kind of takes me out of the piece

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Anonymous replying to -> #1 17w

there are spots it’s a bit clunky, but god i can’t stop rereading it

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Anonymous replying to -> #3 17w

thank you for the feedback. it was pretty much filler to get to the rest the more i reread it myself

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