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Wrote this small excerpt while working on a story

40 upvotes, 5 comments. Yik Yak image post by Anonymous in Writing. "Wrote this small excerpt while working on a story"

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Anonymous 5w

You switch from past tense to present tense and back to past tense. It’s disorienting. Also than vs then.

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Anonymous 5w

this for sure needs to be more than one paragraph…. lmao

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Anonymous

#1 5w

My apologies, I wrote it on a whim

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Anonymous

OP 5w

No need to apologize, just giving you feedback

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Anonymous

#1 5w

Thank you then for the feedback

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